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✧-✧-✧They say that words are stronger
than actions but word's can also hurt more✧-✧-✧
ℂ𝕙𝕚𝕝𝕕 𝕠𝕗 𝕥𝕙𝕖 𝔽𝕝𝕠𝕨𝕖𝕣𝕤

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Need criticism on this!

"Do not pity the dead... pity the living. And above all those who live without love." Albus Dumbledore -
Jacob Harman
INPC: Tina Parker

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Jacob Harman wrote: 9 Jul 2025, 08:11 Need criticism on this!
I think it looks great! You might want to provide some more detail that Liara is an owl though, it took me a while to realize that Liara was a pet and not a human, and later that she was an owl. (hunting applies to multiple pets) Maybe mentioning feathers? Otherwise, awesome! :3

Every flower is a soul blossoming in nature. 𝄞 Shop ˙⋆✮⋆˚࿔ iNPC: Akari Kabukimono

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Just wrote my first solo! :wow:
Boop!

Chocolate, chocolate, and more chocolate

Star and Storm

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Open for feedback on every thread lmao.

The Muggle Condition | Charmer

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Open for feedback on any of my existing threads and solos! ^^

Trust Yourself - Love Yourself - Be Yourself
iNPC = Casey Stone

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New solo posted if you guys want to say things about it! :grin:

Here!

Be the change you wish to see
in the world.

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Avery Gray wrote: 10 Jul 2025, 04:05 New solo posted if you guys want to say things about it! :grin:

Here!
Oh I saw this! Poor Avery ó-o
Though as a piece of writing on its own, it's a bit vague as to what happened with her mother, so as a reader I personally can't fully understand the character because I don't know what she's reacting to, only that it's something about her mother when she was eight ><;;
I'd put something to make it more clear :3

I'm curious what people think of my solo? I've been coming back to it again and again, always in an endless cycle of editing :'D

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𝐭𝐡𝐚𝐧 𝐰𝐚𝐭𝐜𝐡𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐒𝐚𝐭𝐮𝐫𝐧 𝐥𝐨𝐬𝐞 𝐡𝐞𝐫 𝐫𝐢𝐧𝐠𝐬
STA: 5 | EVA: 10 | STR: 3 | WIS: 10 | ARC: 5 | ACC: 7
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Sinclair Carver wrote: 11 Jul 2025, 11:57
Avery Gray wrote: 10 Jul 2025, 04:05 New solo posted if you guys want to say things about it! :grin:

Here!
Oh I saw this! Poor Avery ó-o
Though as a piece of writing on its own, it's a bit vague as to what happened with her mother, so as a reader I personally can't fully understand the character because I don't know what she's reacting to, only that it's something about her mother when she was eight ><;;
I'd put something to make it more clear :3

I'm curious what people think of my solo? I've been coming back to it again and again, always in an endless cycle of editing :'D
I debated whether or not to post this yet because it is supposed to be vague. There’s a thread coming soon that will cause this solo to make more sense.

Be the change you wish to see
in the world.

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Totally forgot to put it here yesterday, but comments pleaasee
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