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True, very good writing, I would love to read the solo once you write it heheSimon Poe wrote: 29 Jun 2025, 20:28This is amazing! I love the sense of mystery you gave it.Eugenia Karageorgiadi wrote: 28 Jun 2025, 07:13 Can someone give feedback on this? I’d like to make a similar solo and English isn’t my first language.
Dance poor people, dance and drown, dance fair Paris to the Ground. Dance poor people, dance and drown, dance fair Paris, ashes now.
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Another solo just finished!
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Oh that’s really good! I don’t really have any feedback to give but I’d love to know what happens next!!
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Thanks! The next part will probably be at summer camp!Piper Hart wrote: 3 Jul 2025, 07:05Oh that’s really good! I don’t really have any feedback to give but I’d love to know what happens next!!
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Oooooh, drama!
I love how the argument was written and how she just immediately decided to write to Mikey
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Yeah. She feels like Mikey is the only one that cares about her. She’s starting to open up to him more in preparation for second year which means that she’ll probably tell him about the argument and how she feels.Nova Astron wrote: 3 Jul 2025, 07:06Oooooh, drama!
I love how the argument was written and how she just immediately decided to write to Mikey
Both of them always write to each other when something bad happens.
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Oooh, I'll definitely keep my eye out for the next partsAvery Gray wrote: 3 Jul 2025, 07:07Yeah. She feels like Mikey is the only one that cares about her. She’s starting to open up to him more in preparation for second year which means that she’ll probably tell him about the argument and how she feels.Nova Astron wrote: 3 Jul 2025, 07:06Oooooh, drama!
I love how the argument was written and how she just immediately decided to write to Mikey
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Reducio
Great read!!
But he's not the only one!Avery Gray wrote: 3 Jul 2025, 07:07Yeah. She feels like Mikey is the only one that cares about her. She’s starting to open up to him more in preparation for second year which means that she’ll probably tell him about the argument and how she feels.Nova Astron wrote: 3 Jul 2025, 07:06Oooooh, drama!
I love how the argument was written and how she just immediately decided to write to Mikey
Both of them always write to each other when something bad happens.
Great read!!
First Ariana thread, open for feedback: poof
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That was amazing! It was as if I could feel exactly what Ari was! I can’t wait to read more!Ariana Westonfield-Rivera wrote: 4 Jul 2025, 23:55ReducioBut he's not the only one!Avery Gray wrote: 3 Jul 2025, 07:07Yeah. She feels like Mikey is the only one that cares about her. She’s starting to open up to him more in preparation for second year which means that she’ll probably tell him about the argument and how she feels.Nova Astron wrote: 3 Jul 2025, 07:06Oooooh, drama!
I love how the argument was written and how she just immediately decided to write to Mikey
Both of them always write to each other when something bad happens.
Great read!!
First Ariana thread, open for feedback: poof
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Aw thank you!!Avery Gray wrote: 5 Jul 2025, 00:01That was amazing! It was as if I could feel exactly what Ari was! I can’t wait to read more!Ariana Westonfield-Rivera wrote: 4 Jul 2025, 23:55ReducioBut he's not the only one!Avery Gray wrote: 3 Jul 2025, 07:07Yeah. She feels like Mikey is the only one that cares about her. She’s starting to open up to him more in preparation for second year which means that she’ll probably tell him about the argument and how she feels.Nova Astron wrote: 3 Jul 2025, 07:06Oooooh, drama!
I love how the argument was written and how she just immediately decided to write to Mikey
Both of them always write to each other when something bad happens.
Great read!!
First Ariana thread, open for feedback: poof
| xxxxx | ⊹✧𝖠𝖱𝖨𝖠𝖭𝖠 ~ ency ☽ 𝖾𝗏𝖾𝗋𝗒 𝖿𝖺𝖼𝖾 𝗐𝖾𝖺𝗋𝗌 𝖺 𝗆𝖺𝗌𝗄 ☾ |
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