Writing Criticism:
Wow! I didn’t expect this many people to be so into this thread when I first started it! Thx to everyone!
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Writing Criticism:
Wait! I thought romantic tension that Mikey had was with Avery! Hmmm. I should totally go detective and find out thisSimon Poe wrote: 17 Jun 2025, 16:55*blinks in utter shock* *gasps* *giggles* *eyes Nyx*Nyx Blackheart wrote: 16 Jun 2025, 22:03 Hi! Can y'all give me some tips on this and if I should edit it? (my parts i mean):
Boop!
1: That is amazing!
2: is that romantic tension between Nyx and Mikey?
3: I have no words. Somebody give this hooman the best book award out there.
| 𝓗𝓪𝔃𝓮𝓵 𝓝𝓮𝓵𝓼𝓸𝓷 𝓓𝓸𝓷𝓪𝓽𝓲𝓸𝓷𝓼 𝓝𝓮𝓮𝓭𝓮𝓭 𝓪𝓽: 𝓟𝓸𝓽𝓪𝓽𝓸 𝓟𝓮𝓮𝓵 |
𝓞𝓻𝓭𝓮𝓻𝓼 𝓝𝓮𝓮𝓭𝓮𝓭 𝓪𝓽: 𝕊𝕥𝕒𝕥𝕤: 𝕊𝕥𝕒 𝟟| 𝔼𝕧𝕒 𝟞| 𝕊𝕥𝕣 𝟝| 𝕎𝕚𝕤 𝟠| 𝔸ℙ 𝟟| 𝔸𝕔𝕔 𝟟| 𝓑𝓮𝓷𝓮𝓪𝓽𝓱 𝓽𝓱𝓮 𝓜𝓸𝓸𝓷𝓵𝓪𝓬𝓮 |
𝓑𝓻𝓮𝓮 𝓖𝓻𝓮𝔂 𝓓𝓸𝓷𝓪𝓽𝓲𝓸𝓷𝓼 𝓝𝓮𝓮𝓭𝓮𝓭 𝓪𝓽: 𝓲𝓝𝓟𝓒 𝓓𝓸𝓷𝓪𝓽𝓲𝓸𝓷𝓼 |
Writing Criticism:
Wait for meeee!Bree Grey wrote: 18 Jun 2025, 23:53Wait! I thought romantic tension that Mikey had was with Avery! Hmmm. I should totally go detective and find out thisSimon Poe wrote: 17 Jun 2025, 16:55*blinks in utter shock* *gasps* *giggles* *eyes Nyx*Nyx Blackheart wrote: 16 Jun 2025, 22:03 Hi! Can y'all give me some tips on this and if I should edit it? (my parts i mean):
Boop!
1: That is amazing!
2: is that romantic tension between Nyx and Mikey?
3: I have no words. Somebody give this hooman the best book award out there.
Writing Criticism:
I’ll ask Mikey!Simon Poe wrote: 18 Jun 2025, 23:54Wait for meeee!Bree Grey wrote: 18 Jun 2025, 23:53Wait! I thought romantic tension that Mikey had was with Avery! Hmmm. I should totally go detective and find out thisSimon Poe wrote: 17 Jun 2025, 16:55*blinks in utter shock* *gasps* *giggles* *eyes Nyx*Nyx Blackheart wrote: 16 Jun 2025, 22:03 Hi! Can y'all give me some tips on this and if I should edit it? (my parts i mean):
Boop!
1: That is amazing!
2: is that romantic tension between Nyx and Mikey?
3: I have no words. Somebody give this hooman the best book award out there.
| 𝓗𝓪𝔃𝓮𝓵 𝓝𝓮𝓵𝓼𝓸𝓷 𝓓𝓸𝓷𝓪𝓽𝓲𝓸𝓷𝓼 𝓝𝓮𝓮𝓭𝓮𝓭 𝓪𝓽: 𝓟𝓸𝓽𝓪𝓽𝓸 𝓟𝓮𝓮𝓵 |
𝓞𝓻𝓭𝓮𝓻𝓼 𝓝𝓮𝓮𝓭𝓮𝓭 𝓪𝓽: 𝕊𝕥𝕒𝕥𝕤: 𝕊𝕥𝕒 𝟟| 𝔼𝕧𝕒 𝟞| 𝕊𝕥𝕣 𝟝| 𝕎𝕚𝕤 𝟠| 𝔸ℙ 𝟟| 𝔸𝕔𝕔 𝟟| 𝓑𝓮𝓷𝓮𝓪𝓽𝓱 𝓽𝓱𝓮 𝓜𝓸𝓸𝓷𝓵𝓪𝓬𝓮 |
𝓑𝓻𝓮𝓮 𝓖𝓻𝓮𝔂 𝓓𝓸𝓷𝓪𝓽𝓲𝓸𝓷𝓼 𝓝𝓮𝓮𝓭𝓮𝓭 𝓪𝓽: 𝓲𝓝𝓟𝓒 𝓓𝓸𝓷𝓪𝓽𝓲𝓸𝓷𝓼 |
Writing Criticism:
Nyx Blackheart wrote: 18 Jun 2025, 20:29I love it! It's really well writtenHikari Fujimoto wrote: 18 Jun 2025, 18:11 Can't believe I'm only just discovering this, but I'd love some reviews on Hikari's latest rp please
Thank youu you twoSimon Poe wrote: 18 Jun 2025, 22:28This is amazing, I have nothing other than that to say!Hikari Fujimoto wrote: 18 Jun 2025, 18:11 Can't believe I'm only just discovering this, but I'd love some reviews on Hikari's latest rp please
this would've been so handy earlier bcz I had such a hard time writing for Hikari
Writing Criticism:
I’ll take any criticism on my writing in general 
Sorry haven’t got too many yet…
Sorry haven’t got too many yet…
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Writing Criticism:
Okie! I'll read one of ur rps soon!Amelia Lerelle wrote: 19 Jun 2025, 13:36 I’ll take any criticism on my writing in general
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ThxNyx Blackheart wrote: 19 Jun 2025, 13:37Okie! I'll read one of ur rps soon!Amelia Lerelle wrote: 19 Jun 2025, 13:36 I’ll take any criticism on my writing in general
It matters not what someone is born, but what they grow to be!
Writing Criticism:
Hi! So I read one of your rps, the Sorting Hat one, and it was really good! Some small suggestions would be (and I'm sorry if this comes off as a bit harsh):Amelia Lerelle wrote: 19 Jun 2025, 13:38ThxNyx Blackheart wrote: 19 Jun 2025, 13:37Okie! I'll read one of ur rps soon!Amelia Lerelle wrote: 19 Jun 2025, 13:36 I’ll take any criticism on my writing in general
I hope these help!1. Space it out a bit more, people who are reading this may want a break in between paragraphs.
2. Try to put the reader in Amelia's perspective, make them feel what she feels.
3. Try to expand your vocabulary, and by that I mean to use new and exciting words, like Minacious, or Perturbation
4. Place yourself in Amelia's shoes and become Amelia
Dance poor people, dance and drown, dance fair Paris to the Ground. Dance poor people, dance and drown, dance fair Paris, ashes now.
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