Gryffinclaw vs Slytherpuff Closed

-31 haha that's a cute idea. And I don't know, just seems lacking....but I finally got it posted, woo woo!

-29\ It doesn't have me in it I hope

I'm gonna read it!!

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-29 I just did! Wow!

-30 he had to get his dance on

-29 Cool! I have a shop out if you want to check it out

Simon Kincaid wrote: 15 Oct 2022, 04:34 And I don't know, just seems lacking....but I finally got it posted, woo woo!

Hm. What do you think it lacked?

I enjoyed it. Colin is definitely stealing this line: "You're more beautiful than any author could put into words."

For me it didn't seem as --- intense. (Like Single Red Rose). No. All the bits were there --- maybe just not as vivid?

No! That's not it either! Not as intimate! That's it! Like: He kissed her. He kissed AngelFyre. His AngelFyre. The intimacy of the moment is obvious and I feel drawn into their story. I didn't feel quite as drawn in this time.


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-29 I agree with Colin!

-30 I think it's because I personally just am not feeling the Ball. They might retreat to the Hufflepuff Common Room to finish out their own Ball before the night is over.

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