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Hikari Fujimoto wrote: 13 Jul 2025, 05:30 Totally forgot to put it here yesterday, but comments pleaasee
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I love your writing! It was really good and enjoyable to read. I was a little confused about the fire in the kitchen chapter though. I didn't exactly realize that Hayato was in the room till the last sentence but maybe that's just my reading comprehension :sweatingbullets:
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Elm Walker wrote: 14 Jul 2025, 13:56
Hikari Fujimoto wrote: 13 Jul 2025, 05:30 Totally forgot to put it here yesterday, but comments pleaasee
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I love your writing! It was really good and enjoyable to read. I was a little confused about the fire in the kitchen chapter though. I didn't exactly realize that Hayato was in the room till the last sentence but maybe that's just my reading comprehension :sweatingbullets:
Oh now that you mention it, it is a little vague
PC: Pamela Graham

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I wrote a post for the Derby, but I'm not sure I like it. Read my horrid writing if you dare
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STA - 7 | EVA - 8 | STR - 6
WIS - 7 | AP - 5 | ACC - 7
Graci
Laren
Jarden
Ardelis
STA - 7 | EVA - 8 | STR - 5
WIS - 4 | AP - 3 | ACC - 8

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Graci Laren wrote: 15 Jul 2025, 15:41 I wrote a post for the Derby, but I'm not sure I like it. Read my horrid writing if you dare
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Its really good, I can picture the scene well! you said Graci is wearing shorts but at a derby, people tend to wear big dresses?
✧-✧-✧They say that words are stronger
than actions but word's can also hurt more✧-✧-✧		 ✿
ℂ𝕙𝕚𝕝𝕕 𝕠𝕗 𝕥𝕙𝕖 𝔽𝕝𝕠𝕨𝕖𝕣𝕤 ❀
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Ellie Randensmith wrote: 15 Jul 2025, 15:47
Graci Laren wrote: 15 Jul 2025, 15:41 I wrote a post for the Derby, but I'm not sure I like it. Read my horrid writing if you dare
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Its really good, I can picture the scene well! you said Graci is wearing shorts but at a derby, people tend to wear big dresses?
She's not a huge dress wearer
STA - 7 | EVA - 8 | STR - 6
WIS - 7 | AP - 5 | ACC - 7
Graci
Laren
Jarden
Ardelis
STA - 7 | EVA - 8 | STR - 5
WIS - 4 | AP - 3 | ACC - 8

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Hi! So these are my Drago threads...... I was wondering if y'all could tell me what you think?

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:wow:

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Apperate!
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I’d like some feedback on this! But also I’d like to know what anyone thinks their relationship will turn out as! Thanks!!
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PC Piper Hart - Slytherin
Deverick Duchesne - Durmstrang
Sta: x | Eva: x | Str: x | Wis: x | Arc: x | Acc: x
Sta: x | Eva: x | Str: x | Wis: x | Arc: x | Acc: x

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Hi there!
Could I get thoughts on this?
The Walking Dressed-Up
"Be careful, but always take a good chance to have fun"
sta • 5 | eva • 3| str • 4
Adora F.|Shop|Castra A.
wis • 5 | arc • 7 | acc • 6

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Adora Fletching wrote: 22 Jul 2025, 01:10 Hi there!
Could I get thoughts on this?
The Walking Dressed-Up
I think it's pretty good! I really like the detail
Dance poor people, dance and drown, dance fair Paris to the Ground. Dance poor people, dance and drown, dance fair Paris, ashes now.
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Nyx Blackheart wrote: 22 Jul 2025, 01:12
Adora Fletching wrote: 22 Jul 2025, 01:10 Hi there!
Could I get thoughts on this?
The Walking Dressed-Up
I think it's pretty good! I really like the detail
Thanks! Anything new of Nyx's or Drago's?
"Be careful, but always take a good chance to have fun"
sta • 5 | eva • 3| str • 4
Adora F.|Shop|Castra A.
wis • 5 | arc • 7 | acc • 6
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